The nightmare of writing a blurb - by Lu Hersey

This June, I have a new book, Broken Ground, coming out with Beaten Track - a lovely, enabling, indie publisher, but one with virtually no marketing budget. Which means marketing this book is mostly down to me. 

Eep.

Where do I begin? A quick check online and I find every site on book marketing emphasises the importance of the book blurb. Apparently this is the absolute essential thing to get right. According to a MasterClass article:

So this is the first big hurdle. For many writers, there's only one thing worse than writing a synopsis - writing your own blurb. You've written a whole book, with a complicated plot, lots of twists and turns, a load of subplots and a galaxy of characters - and now you have to sum that up in a few lines AND make it punchy??

I decide to make a start with the elevator pitch idea. Years ago, I won the Mslexia children's book award and attended a day workshop for all the shortlisted writers where we had to prepare a pitch for an upcoming 'meet the agents' event. In case you don't know, the elevator pitch is one sentence (maybe two or three) to sum up your book and make it grab people's attention - useful if you're ever stuck in a lift with an agent or publisher. Want an example of brilliance? Eion Colfer's pitch for Artemis Fowl. 'Like Die Hard, but with fairies.'  If you want more recent examples, take a look at #PitchWars on twitter... 

Anyway, I've no idea what I came up with that day for Deep Water - I only remember the pitying looks. Fortunately Usborne later wrote the blurb and said it for me... 'What if find out you're not who - or even what - you thought you were'. First rule of blurbs - grab the reader's attention immediately.

I think of Broken Ground as contemporary, myth based fiction, written in a kitchen sink paranormal style. But what genre would Amazon put it under? Probably 'folk horror' (think Wicker Man). So what do I say?

Back to the elevator pitch. 

When deep mining disturbs a terrifying ancient land goddess, Arlo learns the only way to send her back is with a blood sacrifice. But he wasn't responsible for the damage, so why should he have to pay the price?

Hmm. Not exactly punchy - and very dark. Too dark. Needs a rethink, so I go back online. Immediately an American site comes up with the four basic steps to writing a good blurb. It's full of pop-up adverts, which makes me dubious, but there seems to be some good advice. It goes something like this:

1. Introduce your main character (s)

2. Set the stage for your primary conflict

3. Establish the stakes

4. Show the reader WHY this book is for them

The site gives lots of examples, all for best selling books. They emphasise the importance of finding the right words to push your book up in the Amazon algorithms.  Apparently Amazon only displays the first few lines of your description so you have to get it right. Naturally an ad pops up at this point..

Ha. I used to be a copy writer. Surely I can manage this blurb without professional help? Basically I should have got all the four key points in the first couple of sentences. Damn. I've left no room for all the other characters, the crop circles, the magic...does that matter?

There's a lot of stuff under point 4 about showing your reader, who's already looking for your kind of book, that this is the one for them. Thinking about it, I realise that the crop circles and the element of myth and magic are probably more important to my readers. 

Sigh.

Take two:

Things are going badly wrong in Arlo's life. Accused of making crop circles he didn't make, now he and his mother are about to get evicted. Worse, this really weird goth girl, covered in tattoos, keeps turning up wherever he goes and it's spooking him out. When the girl he's in love with starts dating someone else, he thinks things can't get much worse. Until people in his village start dying... 

Hmm. Maybe not enough threat covered in the first few sentences. And will my Amazon algorithms be non existent without the right keywords? What are key words anyway, and do I care? Pah. This is hard. 

A quick check back to the bestseller blurbs and I realise it's now too long winded. And I still haven't got the other thing considered essential by my online guide to blurbs - comparisons with bestsellers written in a similar style. 

Are they serious??? How am I supposed to do that? I settle on a quote a very kind reader provided. 'Broken Ground put me in mind of Susan Cooper's Dark is Rising sequence or Alan Garner's early novels'. 

Aaargh! Adding those names to my blurb and I'm already suffering from a very British problem with self promotion - am I over-egging it by suggesting a comparison with these giants of children's fiction? Setting myself up to be slated by readers? Who cares. This is marketing and I need to get over myself. Oof. 

Hang on a minute. How many people under 40 have heard of either Susan Cooper or Alan Garner? And does anyone write folk horror these days? They might not even know what it means...

How about, 'put me in mind of The Wicker Man'? Hmm. Today's teens watch horror films where I can't even get through the trailer without hiding behind the sofa. And The Wicker Man came out when, exactly? Also, it's actually nothing like The Wicker Man. 

Day one of my marketing campaign really isn't going well. But I've made a start. By the time you read this, I should have settled on some mishmash of my blurb attempts to give the publisher. Hopefully a brilliant cover design will make up for any shortfall - because illustrators are amazing.

Meanwhile, my respect for marketers has already increased a zillionfold. They not only understand algorithms, it's their job to shout about you when you find it hard to shout about yourself. 

I'll give this my best shot - of course.

But frankly, I'd much rather just write the books.

Lu Hersey

The Empathy Map (Part 1) by Tess Berry-Hart

“Empathy; the ability to understand and share the feelings of another.” (ODD)

During a prolonged Google surf around the Internet for a piece of research last month, I came across the term “Empathy Map” on a side-bar. I was indulging in a little procrastination me-time, so I welcomed a little foray into the unknown and clicked on it. Up came an article accompanied by a picture that looked a little like this:

(my own re-creation of similar maps online)

Empathy Maps may be familiar to those who work in copywriting or marketing, but the concept was a totally new one to me. The map above might look a little like an alien's guide to the human condition, as if an intelligent life form has just been beamed down to Earth and wants to analyse and categorise the amorphous seething mass of firing neurons inside a human mind - but essentially, an Empathy Map is a business tool; a “guide to putting yourself in your customer’s head,” in order to sell something to a consumer more effectively by triggering their emotions. As a salesperson, you would make a list in all the four boxes - what does this person think (when they see my product) - what do they see? How do they feel, and what then will they do (with my product?)

Think of all the adverts for banks, cars, washing products etc – which have moved on from the crass business of pushing products and logos on our existential post-9/11 society, to focusing on our hopes, dreams and aspirations. For instance, a car isn't just a car now, it's a machine for living - whereby you can travel the desert indulging your love of adventure, collect your beloved children from school safely (giving you that nurturing feeling), AND have hot strangers ogle your pumpin' wheels as you drive by! We can all think of these kind of adverts - the Sainsbury’s advert about the First World War football match pushed our “giving” and "desire for world unity" buttons by giving us the sense that “at Christmas anything is possible.” (So go buy a chocolate bar). The Proctor & Gamble advert during the Olympics showed many mothers – in favellas, country villages and townships from Brazil to Africa - washing the clothes of their children who then grow up to become star athletes through their love and dedication. And more overtly, there’s the Google advert where a man documents his new-born daughter’s development through a series of YouTube videos, pictures and emails. Large corporations pour a lot of money into research about “personas” and “worldviews” to better understand their potential “ideal” customer.

I have to be honest, it gave me the shivers to see “empathy” expressed as a cold hard marketing tool in this way – because aren’t we actually saying that “manipulate” would be a closer term?  "Empathy” is the ability to understand what it is like to be in someone’s shoes. “Manipulate” means to control or influence (a person or situation) cleverly or unscrupulously (Oxford Dictionary definitions).  And there’s a world of difference between empathising with someone’s situation and actively influencing them to DO something – part with their hard-earned cash, say. But “manipulation maps” don’t sound too great!  

So where am I going with all this?

Well, it got me thinking – one of the most valuable gifts from reading books and novels is gaining the ability to empathise. Through entering into our characters' heads, our readers see their interior thoughts and feelings, absorb their past experiences and understand WHY they think, feel and act as they do. And we as writers WANT to trigger the emotions of our readers. We want them to feel what it’s like to be a prisoner in chains, or bullied at school, or leading a charge of whooping tribesmen across the Asian plain in 1536. We want them to not be able to put our work down, to keep reading, to cry, laugh and hold their breath. And of course, we want them to buy the next book in our series!

But, you cry, triggering our readers' desire to empathise is surely not the same as cynically manipulating a consumer to buy something. Readers read because they actively seek empathy, they want to know what it's like to be in someone else's shoes, and the sale of a book, a DVD or audio-CD is merely a by-product of that. 

Well, I'd agree with that, and although there are doubtless many writers who just want to make a quick buck and don't care about the quality of their work, I'd argue that MOST of us are people who got into the business of writing because we have something we want to say. Most of us want to make connections with our fellow humans, not to simply SELL them something, but to let them hear our message and - not wanting to get too messianic here - somehow help the human condition for the better. 

It's interesting how closely the two can be confused, however. A couple of years ago I wrote a play about Sam Hallam, a 17-year old who I believed had been wrongly convicted of a crime he didn't commit. One reviewer wrote: "This is moving drama but just as we are asked to draw our own conclusions, the echoes of the ‘correct’ ones posited by Berry-Hart hang manipulatively in the air." Well actually, I wasn't asking anyone to draw their own conclusions. I was trying to show the shaky evidence on which Sam had been convicted, to make the audience FEEL what it was like to be wrongly imprisoned, to be taken away from your friends and family and incarcerated for seven years, living in a violent and dangerous borstal when you are still only a child. But even this most basic appeal for empathy - the very act of asking someone to step into another's shoes - was seen as "manipulation". 

(Six weeks later though, in May 2012, Sam Hallam was released from the doors of the Court of Appeal after three judges decided that his conviction should be quashed, so I can totally live with that!)

So in our modern world, is empathy really a commodity to be sold, or a tool to be used for commercial or other gain? Isn't empathy instead something inherent in us that makes us people, sets us apart from brute nature, and can be brought out from us by reading?

There's quite a lack of empathy in our news and written media today - people who aren't "the same as us" or who are seeking a better life are being dehumanised and seen as "the other" or "the problem." Maybe David Cameron and others in our government could do with their own version of the Empathy Map! In my next post I'm going to explore the attitudes which take away our empathy - towards migrants, those on low-incomes, or people with different religions or politics from us - and discuss some of the amazing children's books which help foster a sense of empathy and remind us what it is to be human. 

Do let me know what you think, and stay tuned for Part 2 of the Empathy Map, next month!